That is a very good thesis statement. It throws your point out there and makes you want to read more like "hey, prove it." Although I don't think I'd end it with "children or people". I kind of sounds like you're saying children aren't people...which could be argued lol. But I'm confused. I thought we had to write it about our web community. Maybe I'm wrong...or I just missed the connection between violent video games and web communities =P
Jeffrey, This is a good statement but don't you think it is too general or broad. Like Katrina said, we have to make an argument on any issue concerning our cyber community
I think this is good, too, but it needs some tweaking. First of all, fix your spelling mistakes! I'm sure if you proofread before you post, you will catch them. It's hard to read a sentence seriously when "violence" and "violent" are both spelled incorrectly.
On the question of specificity, though, I think this works. I do want you to write about your specific cyber-community, but it's more important that you relate it to a significant issue. So here you could use xboxlive as an example to illustrate your main argument, that video game violence and real violence are unrelated.
Your final essay for this course will be a carefully researched history of something that we don’t often think of as having a history: cultural institutions, concepts, and inventions that we usually take for granted. You will talk about the origins of your topic, as well as how it has evolved through the years and what effect it has on our lives today. You will not just describe but analyze; in other words, you should ask not just when something came about but also how and why. You will research in teams of four or five students. Your research must be presented in an annotated bibliography on a group wiki (created on Google Sites). Each of you will be responsible for reporting (min. 300 words) on at least one source related to the topic (Wikipedia does not count). Then, using these sources, each of you will write your own 4-5 page paper on your group topic. Your paper must cite at least four sources, including one book, one periodical, and one online source. You can share sources with the other members of your group. All citations must be in proper MLA format.
Schedule
Wed. Nov. 19: Library visit. Do exploratory research. Mon. Nov. 24: Meet with group in class, choose topic, divide responsibilities. Wed. Nov. 26: Do research, meet with group. Set up wiki. Mon. Dec. 1: Deadline for posting basic bibliography to wiki. Sat. Dec. 6: Deadline for annotations to wiki. Mon. Dec. 8: In-class presentation of research. Wed. Dec. 10: First draft of paper due; peer review. Mon. Dec. 15: Final paper due. Group self-evaluations.
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That is a very good thesis statement. It throws your point out there and makes you want to read more like "hey, prove it." Although I don't think I'd end it with "children or people". I kind of sounds like you're saying children aren't people...which could be argued lol. But I'm confused. I thought we had to write it about our web community. Maybe I'm wrong...or I just missed the connection between violent video games and web communities =P
Jeffrey,
This is a good statement but don't you think it is too general or broad. Like Katrina said, we have to make an argument on any issue concerning our cyber community
Hi Jeffrey
I think this is good, too, but it needs some tweaking. First of all, fix your spelling mistakes! I'm sure if you proofread before you post, you will catch them. It's hard to read a sentence seriously when "violence" and "violent" are both spelled incorrectly.
On the question of specificity, though, I think this works. I do want you to write about your specific cyber-community, but it's more important that you relate it to a significant issue. So here you could use xboxlive as an example to illustrate your main argument, that video game violence and real violence are unrelated.
Corey
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