Hello, I thought the thesis statement was supposed to be on the privacy issues we discussed in class rather than our cyberhoods we presented on. So, which is it? Anywho, here are both thesis statements just in case. Let me know what you think...thanks!
"Cyber privacy is a growing concern that mus't be over looked."
-OR-
"Child safety on myspace is a growing concern that musn't be overlooked."
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Hello Escobar, I believe its our cyberhood. Ask Corey if you are still not sure. Going back to your cyberhood thesis, I think its little to general for a thesis statement. From what I remember from class, the statement must address your argument in a manner that you can defend and explain your side of the argument. I might be wrong, as I said before, ask Corey.
I think it gets the point across but I agree that it might be a bit too general. I'm still trying to figure out my own thesis statement =P But it looks like it will be an interesting essay. I'm looking foward to reading it.
Hello Escobar,
I think Miguel is right. We have to write on cyberhood and not on a general issue about privacy. we have to make an argument addressing a issue about our cyber community instead of making a general statement.
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